I concur! Another excellent chapter. I am not sure either why you are not pleased. I think it was very good, very dramatic and of course those kisses, Mmmm.
I appreciated the explanations provided and am amazed at the detail and depth of the plot. I really like this.
Looking forward to more! I will haye to see it end!
One little bitty typo correction you may want to make: Abraham leaned in further and took the Harry’s earlobe into his mouth. He moaned as the vampire suckled on his ear. I do not think you want the word "the" before Harry's earlobe to be there. I hope it is okay I pointed this out? I have never done it, but I thought that I would want to know.
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on 2005-08-25 02:21 am (UTC)I appreciated the explanations provided and am amazed at the detail and depth of the plot. I really like this.
Looking forward to more! I will haye to see it end!
One little bitty typo correction you may want to make: Abraham leaned in further and took the Harry’s earlobe into his mouth. He moaned as the vampire suckled on his ear. I do not think you want the word "the" before Harry's earlobe to be there. I hope it is okay I pointed this out? I have never done it, but I thought that I would want to know.